And that is the big problem: tone and the sometimes subtle technical meanings. I just don't know whether, for instance, "vital" could substitute for "critical".
But, to my eye, "significant negative consequences for public health" is a long-winded way of obscuring just what this is about. I've got a sneaking sympathy for Bulwer-Lyyton, but you need to get away from the equivalent of the infamous "It was a dark and stormy night..."
(And, yes, I know that some of this language is there to conserve the medical profession's sanity.)
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Date: 2010-04-22 03:32 pm (UTC)But, to my eye, "significant negative consequences for public health" is a long-winded way of obscuring just what this is about. I've got a sneaking sympathy for Bulwer-Lyyton, but you need to get away from the equivalent of the infamous "It was a dark and stormy night..."
(And, yes, I know that some of this language is there to conserve the medical profession's sanity.)